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On Sunday afternoon,
after exiting the church,
you plucked the sun from the sky
and hid it in your palms
so that when I held your hands
they would no longer be cold.

When Monday night arrived
you snatched every single star
and used my tears to make
a necklace.

Tuesday's empty dawn shone
through the cracks of the door--
you stole the promise of what
could never be
and draped it around my shoulders.

After Wednesday's twilight passed,
you grabbed the clouds
and wove a tapestry of lies
that I hung on the walls
of my prison.

Thursday crept through us
on silent tiptoes,
waiting for us to take notice--
instead, we merely waited
for midnight to come.

The dusk of Friday waned
while you stripped it of its sorrows
and sewed them into my skin.

When Saturday came
you tried to steal the moon;
I watched as you stood on your tombstone
and stretched to reach it.
You fell, then--
fell, broke your neck,
and landed six feet under.

I couldn't cry afterwards,
for you had taken my agony
and washed it out to sea.

Rather, I stuck around
as Sunday loomed
to watch your trinkets
return themselves to the lives
they'd lived before.

I guess you were right:
it was only borrowing after all.
This is whatever you make it out to be. 
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Daily Deviation

Given 2014-02-12
:iconcristinewakesuphappy:
cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:iconluvluvplz:
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you like it :heart:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014   Writer
Featured here fav.me/d7cujk8
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:iconivanradev:
IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Professional General Artist
This is really amazing, I really like the nature references.

I'd be so honoured to do a collab with you :) 
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, hey. Thanks :3

And I've never done a collaboration with someone, but I'd certainly be open to trying it
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:iconivanradev:
IvanRadev Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Professional General Artist
Welcome and thanks :)

I will note you about the collab :heart:
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TuesdayNightCompany Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
Everything you borrowed, the nothing I stole...
I'm not fond of poetry as a category, but this lit a spark in my mind.  Nicely done.
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, why thank you!
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:icongrace-of-the-muses:
Grace-of-the-Muses Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Wow. That's good
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :heart:
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:icongrace-of-the-muses:
Grace-of-the-Muses Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
you're welcome!
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:iconsuperherogodess18:
superherogodess18 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i love it! if only i could have such creativity!! this actually means so many things and really is relateable for me...
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I wanted it to be something everyone could try and relate to :)
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:iconayzeee:
AyZeee Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written! There are many idiotic poems on the internet, and this is not one of them. Congrats on DD!
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much I'm glad you liked it
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:iconayzeee:
AyZeee Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm glad I came across it! <3
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:icondomingothecat:
DomingoTheCat Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why do you make me cry after reading this.
WHAI ;N;??


-sob sob-
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorrraaaa :icontissueplz:
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:icondomingothecat:
DomingoTheCat Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
donn worry. it's fine ;n;...
eeeeeeeeeee:iconihugyouplz:
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:iconcinderdog13:
cinderdog13 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
cool, makes me more careful about what I "borrow".
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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Time-Signature Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student General Artist

What are you trying to do, make me cry from the feels?!

 

So so beautiful, so deep, so...feeeeeels!

 

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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry DX :icontissueplz:
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:icontime-signature:
Time-Signature Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student General Artist

//sniffles

It's okay.

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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
^-^
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:iconmorgancolene:
MorganColene Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student General Artist
This is just beautiful... great imagery
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :iconbrohugplz:
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:iconkhalilk:
KhalilK Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
I have no idea what I just read....but it is some nice poetry. Congratulations on the DD.
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Honestly, I have no idea what it's supposed to interpret XD but thanks anyway
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:iconlillysdigitalgarden:
lillysdigitalgarden Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
incredible work, so powerful!
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, thank you so much 
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:iconamightywhisper:
amightywhisper Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014   Digital Artist
absolutely lovely :heart:
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you
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:iconfireflight5045:
FireFlight5045 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
woah.... I love this
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you do :D
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:iconfireflight5045:
FireFlight5045 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:)
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
^-^ thanks
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:icontruthistruth:
TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconnatmonkey:
Natmonkey Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Excellent imagery. Very powerful.
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you :heart:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure! :heart:
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:iconliltwinstar:
liltwinstar Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
Waaaah! Clap 
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconheartglompplz:
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:iconturduckenhusky:
turduckenhusky Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
beautiful and delicate.
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:iconstarlightcomet:
StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconkiliann:
Kiliann Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student Writer
There are so many different ways to interpret this, and I love it. It's creative and it makes one think.

Congratulations on your DD! You've earned it.
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